Wednesday, October 12, 2011

Short Story Slam Week 12


Born a white turnip,
I’m advantaged,
Dad’s love,
Mommy’s grace,
Following me like a dove
in a magical place,
Evenly,
I breathe,
Freely,
I dream,
Gently,
I sense his gaze,
Silently,
I scream:
I won’t take everything for granted,
I will listen, learn, and change the world with admirable energy,
Follow me,
We'll fight for equality
and promote the values of family,
                Watch me,
I won’t discriminate anybody.
                                           
        

52 comments:

  1. I like all these rhymes! and the message of course

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  2. That's beautiful, and the picture compliments is wonderful too :o)

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  3. Great message in this. And it flows perfectly.

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  4. Very well said and flowed fluently with a great message embedded!!

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  5. Wonderful message, I really enjoyed this. I think (not being a parent myself) that so many dreams are put into an unborn/newborn child.

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  6. This is really beautiful! Very well done Morning!!!! Loved it, Terri

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  7. This is one of those poems that you think is going to be for children and all of a sudden you realize the message is very adult. Lovely.

    By the way, if you want to learn how to do the Mr. Linky thing, I wrote down the instructions. It's quite easy and I use the simplest, free link.

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  8. Silently I scream!

    Love the speed of this piece!

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  9. I like the ending :)
    thanks for the visit!

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  10. born a white turnip is sooooo funny. that is what a baby is shaped like, isn't it? LOL. for some reason Gone With the Wind came to mind *end of part one, when she is digging turnips??

    it's the answer to my poem, n'est pas? :)

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  11. I loved this one.. such beautifully you have put across the message! :)

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  12. Good message, Morning! I like this one!

    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/10/12/foobaw-daddy-foobaw/

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  13. what a gorgeous poem, you should frame this and hang it up in junior's room or record yourself reciting
    the poem lu.

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  14. Sweetly put, Morning! You are so talented! My 3WW: http://verseinanutshell.wordpress.com/2011/10/12/believe/

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  15. People power! Turnip :) I bet this poem would sound good live.

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  16. a tension between this new hope
    and our crazy world

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  17. Beautiful rhyming pattern, wonderful message... yet still, a little bit dreamy and hopeful.

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  18. Beautifully woven with powerful message of hope and inspiration!!

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  19. I love how your poem has at points the rhythm of the breath. Beautiful work!

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  20. Beautiful! Thank you for stopping by. This poem is actually based on fact as my grandson's father was killed in Sept. 2010.

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  21. I like this. Very interesting and powerful. Good work.

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  22. I was hooked the first delightful line! Loved it.

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  23. That is a precious poem and honestly isn't it what all parents would love from their children?

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  24. It was so beautiful... like a prayer.. a plea!!! lovely

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  25. beautiful! I love "born a white turnip!"

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  26. There's a wonderful message in your poem ! And I love the reflective tone as well !

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  27. The baby grows up to be a powerful force to be reckoned with! I love it!

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  28. This could be hanging in a frame on the wall of any babies room. Just delightful ... you have said it all.
    Very nice,
    Isadora

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  29. Wonderful poem and great message.

    Anna :o]

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  30. Lovely thoughts. Such a wonderful feeling for a child - the gaze of his/her father.. :)

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  31. Intristic messages wrapped in a delightful prose package - loved the read!

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  32. This is written with wisdom and beauty. Thank you!

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  33. Very, very nice read.
    ZQ

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  34. A Monday story for my Monday morning. Nice narrative poem...

    Poem on ...

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  35. A Monday story for my Monday morning. Nice narrative poem...

    Poem on ...

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  36. Your poems are so wonderful and this has such a great message. I really enjoy your work so much
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/17/to-my-son/

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  37. I feel the love and strength of passion the father has for his new born child.
    Such love
    Blessings

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  38. Values the little mite will need in life, indeed. A touching write - the first 6 lines are terrific openers!

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  39. Lovely... much more hopeful than my offering :-)

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