Wednesday, October 12, 2011

Short Story Slam Week 12


Born a white turnip,
I’m advantaged,
Dad’s love,
Mommy’s grace,
Following me like a dove
in a magical place,
Evenly,
I breathe,
Freely,
I dream,
Gently,
I sense his gaze,
Silently,
I scream:
I won’t take everything for granted,
I will listen, learn, and change the world with admirable energy,
Follow me,
We'll fight for equality
and promote the values of family,
                Watch me,
I won’t discriminate anybody.
                                           
        
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52 comments:

  1. maritOctober 12, 2011 at 8:53 AM

    I like all these rhymes! and the message of course

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  2. DeborahOctober 12, 2011 at 9:14 AM

    That's beautiful, and the picture compliments is wonderful too :o)

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  3. anthonynorthOctober 12, 2011 at 9:33 AM

    Great message in this. And it flows perfectly.

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  4. NankaOctober 12, 2011 at 10:08 AM

    Very well said and flowed fluently with a great message embedded!!

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  5. AnonymousOctober 12, 2011 at 10:43 AM

    Wonderful message, I really enjoyed this. I think (not being a parent myself) that so many dreams are put into an unborn/newborn child.

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  6. Sheilagh LeeOctober 12, 2011 at 11:20 AM

    wonderful message.

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  7. theborgpoetOctober 12, 2011 at 11:42 AM

    great message..

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  8. MaryOctober 12, 2011 at 11:54 AM

    Beautiful!

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  9. Alice AudreyOctober 12, 2011 at 12:03 PM

    Something to be hoped for.

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  10. Teresa MarieOctober 12, 2011 at 1:30 PM

    This is really beautiful! Very well done Morning!!!! Loved it, Terri

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  11. AnonymousOctober 12, 2011 at 3:07 PM

    Lovely poem with a lovely message.

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  12. VictoriaOctober 12, 2011 at 4:26 PM

    This is one of those poems that you think is going to be for children and all of a sudden you realize the message is very adult. Lovely.

    By the way, if you want to learn how to do the Mr. Linky thing, I wrote down the instructions. It's quite easy and I use the simplest, free link.

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  13. andy sewinaOctober 12, 2011 at 6:16 PM

    Silently I scream!

    Love the speed of this piece!

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  14. LBTLOctober 12, 2011 at 6:37 PM

    I like the ending :)
    thanks for the visit!

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  15. AnonymousOctober 12, 2011 at 7:48 PM

    born a white turnip is sooooo funny. that is what a baby is shaped like, isn't it? LOL. for some reason Gone With the Wind came to mind *end of part one, when she is digging turnips??

    it's the answer to my poem, n'est pas? :)

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  16. The twenties girlOctober 12, 2011 at 8:53 PM

    I loved this one.. such beautifully you have put across the message! :)

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  17. Marbles in My PocketOctober 12, 2011 at 9:05 PM

    Good message, Morning! I like this one!

    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/10/12/foobaw-daddy-foobaw/

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  18. ShaunaOctober 12, 2011 at 9:29 PM

    what a gorgeous poem, you should frame this and hang it up in junior's room or record yourself reciting
    the poem lu.

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  19. AvaOctober 12, 2011 at 9:59 PM

    Sweetly put, Morning! You are so talented! My 3WW: http://verseinanutshell.wordpress.com/2011/10/12/believe/

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  20. K. Shawn EdgarOctober 12, 2011 at 11:46 PM

    People power! Turnip :) I bet this poem would sound good live.

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  21. lucychiliOctober 13, 2011 at 12:40 AM

    a tension between this new hope
    and our crazy world

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  22. ReflectionsOctober 13, 2011 at 7:52 AM

    Beautiful rhyming pattern, wonderful message... yet still, a little bit dreamy and hopeful.

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  23. AnonymousOctober 13, 2011 at 8:30 AM

    Beautifully woven with powerful message of hope and inspiration!!

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  24. AnonymousOctober 13, 2011 at 8:39 AM

    I love how your poem has at points the rhythm of the breath. Beautiful work!

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  25. JJ Roa RodriguezOctober 13, 2011 at 9:07 AM

    wonderful!

    JJRod'z

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  26. Debra Gray-ElliottOctober 13, 2011 at 9:56 AM

    Beautiful! Thank you for stopping by. This poem is actually based on fact as my grandson's father was killed in Sept. 2010.

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  27. Jae RoseOctober 13, 2011 at 10:48 AM

    Powerful piece Morning..Jae

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  28. Dave HollowayOctober 13, 2011 at 10:54 AM

    I like this. Very interesting and powerful. Good work.

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  29. Belva Rae StaplesOctober 13, 2011 at 11:10 AM

    Very nice! The turnip part is cute!

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  30. keiths ramblingsOctober 13, 2011 at 11:19 AM

    I was hooked the first delightful line! Loved it.

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  31. Kristen HaskellOctober 13, 2011 at 1:12 PM

    That is a precious poem and honestly isn't it what all parents would love from their children?

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  32. davidrheinsOctober 13, 2011 at 2:30 PM

    who doesn't like turnips?

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  33. Bethe77October 13, 2011 at 11:39 PM

    Beautiful!
    Blessings

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  34. MedhiniOctober 14, 2011 at 3:29 AM

    It was so beautiful... like a prayer.. a plea!!! lovely

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  35. LolamouseOctober 14, 2011 at 6:06 AM

    beautiful! I love "born a white turnip!"

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  36. MISHOctober 14, 2011 at 8:12 AM

    There's a wonderful message in your poem ! And I love the reflective tone as well !

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  37. AnonymousOctober 14, 2011 at 10:28 AM

    The baby grows up to be a powerful force to be reckoned with! I love it!

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  38. IsadoraOctober 14, 2011 at 4:36 PM

    This could be hanging in a frame on the wall of any babies room. Just delightful ... you have said it all.
    Very nice,
    Isadora

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  39. Anna :o]October 14, 2011 at 8:12 PM

    Wonderful poem and great message.

    Anna :o]

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  40. KirtimaliniOctober 15, 2011 at 10:21 AM

    Lovely thoughts. Such a wonderful feeling for a child - the gaze of his/her father.. :)

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  41. AnonymousOctober 15, 2011 at 10:15 PM

    Intristic messages wrapped in a delightful prose package - loved the read!

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  42. KayOctober 16, 2011 at 2:11 AM

    This is written with wisdom and beauty. Thank you!

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  43. AnonymousOctober 16, 2011 at 8:55 AM

    Very, very nice read.
    ZQ

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  44. AnonymousOctober 16, 2011 at 9:47 AM

    wonderful thoughts:)

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  45. JamieDedesOctober 17, 2011 at 10:23 AM

    A Monday story for my Monday morning. Nice narrative poem...

    Poem on ...

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  46. JamieDedesOctober 17, 2011 at 10:23 AM

    A Monday story for my Monday morning. Nice narrative poem...

    Poem on ...

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  47. Ann LeFloreOctober 18, 2011 at 5:32 PM

    Your poems are so wonderful and this has such a great message. I really enjoy your work so much
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/17/to-my-son/

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  48. Bethe77October 18, 2011 at 10:47 PM

    I feel the love and strength of passion the father has for his new born child.
    Such love
    Blessings

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  49. Shail RaghuvanshiOctober 19, 2011 at 12:35 AM

    Such a sweet little piece of verse..

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  50. HelenaOctober 19, 2011 at 11:38 AM

    Values the little mite will need in life, indeed. A touching write - the first 6 lines are terrific openers!

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  51. e.a.s. demersOctober 20, 2011 at 7:43 PM

    Lovely... much more hopeful than my offering :-)

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  52. AnonymousOctober 21, 2011 at 9:28 PM

    Absolutely, adorable piece

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