Wednesday, October 5, 2011

Pre-existence Makes Sense Only If - - -



I didn't know I wasn't there,
I won't know I'm not,
Across the Pacific Ocean somewhere,
My life reveals its plot.
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I've let the World War I & II slip,
I missed the sink of Tanta-tic Ship,
I have no clue at all
about Rome's Rise and Fall.
.
My absence of world famous events
offers me No disturbance,
No did I feel deprived
since grace falls at my birth.
.
Pre-existence makes sense
Only if one purifies facts from books,
I'm not married to you,
No need to come to my rescue.

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33 comments:

  1. theborgpoetOctober 5, 2011 at 2:48 PM

    Nice line: I didn't know I wasn't there,
    I won't know I'm not,

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  2. Rocky Mountain WomanOctober 5, 2011 at 3:11 PM

    I really love this! It's well written and quite thought provoking. I've thought the same thing for years, but couldn't say it quite so elegantly...

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  3. My name is RietOctober 5, 2011 at 3:28 PM

    Nice lines , well written.

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  4. ShadiatiqueOctober 5, 2011 at 4:33 PM

    Cool and provoking poem. Loved every word ;)
    Thanks
    S.

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  5. LolaOctober 5, 2011 at 4:44 PM

    So thought provoking - excellent.

    Thanks for stopping by,

    XOXO Lola:)

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  6. Lu AnnOctober 5, 2011 at 7:59 PM

    Ive never seen the world like that... thanks a lot for the image!

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  7. JudieOctober 5, 2011 at 8:40 PM

    This really is very thought-provoking! It is an excellent piece, especially the part about the Titanic.

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  8. AnonymousOctober 5, 2011 at 9:09 PM

    If life is in the now why the fuss over monuments, eh?

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  9. ClaudiaOctober 5, 2011 at 10:55 PM

    smiles...this got my immediate attention because i was there this summer in rome....at the colloseum...yeah but living in the moment is what is important...though there's a lot we can learn from the past

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  10. Alex DissingOctober 6, 2011 at 12:45 AM

    What a cool concept! Nicely done. Very nicely done.

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  11. Tina´s PicStoryOctober 6, 2011 at 3:24 AM

    wonderful picture :)

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  12. Liz Rice-SosneOctober 6, 2011 at 7:23 AM

    This poem makes one think. This is a very interesting line of thought!

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  13. Debra Gray-ElliottOctober 6, 2011 at 7:55 AM

    This is excellent and paints a wonderful picture. Thank you for stopping by.

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  14. 21 WitsOctober 6, 2011 at 8:38 AM

    Much to think about here....stunning!

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  15. steveroniOctober 6, 2011 at 8:57 AM

    "I didn't know I was there..." reminds me of that child living in poverty. Doesn't even know of opulence yet. And when child gets there, might not remember that it once was not.
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    A hand reaches out for help. My obligation (to myself) is to grab that hand and at least show what happened to turn my own life around.
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    Aside from your talent and (humor?) I really like (LOVE!--grin!) that I can publish a comment here without having to fill in stupid verification letters. THANK YOU!!!

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  16. DaydreamertooOctober 6, 2011 at 9:17 AM

    Lovely, the past is what helps shape the present though, whether we were there or not. Great alibi!~! LOL
    Lovely, deep and thought provoking.

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  17. BajanpoetOctober 6, 2011 at 10:20 AM

    Thought provoking ... makes me think ... "I'm not married to you, No need to come to my rescue."

    I've been reading this poem multiple times ...

    Great write!

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  18. tinkwelbornOctober 6, 2011 at 11:42 AM

    good starter:

    I didn't know I wasn't there,
    I won't know I'm not,

    the poem's got a nice rhythm and 3-beat canter, like History is motion. ;-)

    purifying facts from books is neat....for, that's what we do, isn't it?

    Nice poem. Thank you.

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  19. EG CameraGirlOctober 6, 2011 at 11:55 AM

    Deep thoughts here. I'm interpreting it to mean that you know little about history because you weren't born yet. All you know has come from books.

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  20. Victoria Ceretto-SlottoOctober 6, 2011 at 11:59 AM

    The last two lines surprise and, in a way, delight!

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  21. LolamouseOctober 6, 2011 at 12:56 PM

    I enjoyed your take on life (and pre-existence!) It gave me something to think about!

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  22. LouiseOctober 6, 2011 at 12:59 PM

    Your poem is a puzzle to ponder over...from the first line to the last. I love poems like this that leave the reader in a mystery at the end. :)

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  23. AnonymousOctober 6, 2011 at 1:31 PM

    Very interesting beginning and close. (And middle.)

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  24. AnonymousOctober 6, 2011 at 1:41 PM

    I really enjoyed this! The last two lines have left me pondering.

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  25. Laurie KolpOctober 6, 2011 at 6:27 PM

    Mysterious... love the rhythm and flow.

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  26. UnknownOctober 6, 2011 at 6:31 PM

    I thought this had a mystical feel to it, wondering of past lifetimes colliding with the present.

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  27. UnknownOctober 6, 2011 at 6:40 PM

    Very nicely done, love the first and second stanza's- written very well. Thanks for the read

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  28. AnnesphamilyOctober 6, 2011 at 9:33 PM

    Well written! I liked reading here today. Enjoy your weekend and thanks for the share!

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  29. Have a Daily Cup of Mrs. OlsonOctober 6, 2011 at 11:39 PM

    Hi,
    You are really an amazing writer. There are some profound statements there. I really enjoyed it. It saddens me that history can sometimes be lost. Thanks for visiting me and for your sweet comment.

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  30. Gerry SnapeOctober 7, 2011 at 6:21 AM

    "Nor did I feel deprived
    Since grace falls at my birth"...what superb two lines...the whole poem is so readable and poem are meant to be read out loud....love it...thankyou also for popping over to my site.

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  31. ScarletOctober 7, 2011 at 7:41 AM

    I enjoyed the cadence and flow of words.

    Specially the last verses.. you come on strong~

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  32. John E. WordSlingerOctober 9, 2011 at 8:46 AM

    Very powerful, and original, I loved it, thank you, much appreciated, WS

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  33. JennyOctober 9, 2011 at 6:31 PM

    That first couplet is totally brilliant. Wow.

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