Thursday, September 29, 2011

A Short Story in 55 Words


 Xcitedly,
She blows them off
her red lips,
The way she eXits
bad friendships;
eXcellently,
Bubbles swim,
climbing above her hands,
Carrying dreams;
Bubbles scream,
Traveling with winds,
bearing regrets;
Light touches down,
Whispering joy,
It doesn't matter
how short a life lives,
Nothing is better
than 
creating 
something
eXtraordinary
and
beautiful
to reach
bliss.

Alphabe-Thursday (X=Xcitedly, eXcellent, eXit, eXtraordinary)



                

58 comments:

  1. Great writing on this! Oh, and I love blowing bubbles!!

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  2. And when it makes the world a better place, as your words do here... Total bliss achieved.

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  3. Charming and full of fun !
    http://writer-in-transit.co.za/bubble-bravado/

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  4. So....
    Ya killed 4 birds with one stone eh?
    You Rocked this out Morning!
    Loved your 55
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

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  5. I love the last lines! Nothing is better! xoXox

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  6. nice playon the letter X...a fun read...

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  7. Exuberant playful bubbles! Fun 55. :)

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  8. Creating something extraordinary is empowering!

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  9. Visiting from Poets United, I'd say this is an Xquisite red write! A vivid scene painted with words.

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  10. Exactly. if the life is well lived, it doesn't matter counting the years.
    A lovely piece.

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  11. it all starts with those red lips...

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  12. Very enjoyable, and I like the sentiment expressed in the last sentence. Beautifully said.

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  13. I loved this one!! Great job. Peace, Terri

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  14. like the fun and bubbly read ~

    have a good weekend ~

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  15. Wonderful words and thoughts, so well written.
    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/09/30/bubbles-and-lies/

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  16. * Applause!!* This is just beautiful!!! :))

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  17. Very cool! I love the rhythm of this story-poem!

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  18. X-ceedingly well done. You blew some away with this one....!!

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  19. now that is what I call a quality piece.. nice rhythm and a cutting edge too.. I shall be back.. ;)

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  20. ah yes.. the ending is bliss.. an unconscious nod?

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  21. Morning this is so charming and filled with so much fun. Thank you for the visit to my blog site and the lovely comment you left me. I love your blog and enjoy reading it so much
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/09/29/bubbling-potion-of-love/

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  22. You have just manifested what you have shared -- "creating something eXtraordinary and beautiful". Beautiful! :)

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  23. Love the idea of reaching for bliss!

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  24. The woven themes... experiences, release, bubbles, relationships... lend a depth to this short piece. Terrific use of metaphor.

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  25. short lived but so beautiful! {:-Deb

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  26. I love the fun element that comes through. It is eXcellently done.
    Namaste,
    Isadora

    http://insidethemindofisadora.wordpress.com/2011/09/30/bubble-magic/

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  27. I love how everything just congeals - and in only 55 words! I can't seem to get across a story in less than 1000!

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  28. you speak to me. creating something beautiful is one of the very best things of existence.
    :)
    thanks for your support:)
    i think you are a truly amazing poet.

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  29. You've given me a bit of bliss with the description.

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  30. Bubbles Bubbles such gleee.
    Thank you for sharing.

    Im going to put a link up to your blog from my blog. :)Hope you dont mind

    Regards
    The PostMan
    http://postcardsinthewind.blogspot.com/

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  31. Excellent piece, I like the imagery of this.

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  32. I really enjoyed this one, Thanks!

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  33. This is so great! All those Xes are used perfectly. I am seeing this as a poster. :)

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  34. I really like this one and love the first stanza. I wrote one with a different take on bubbles you might like.
    http://blackswanpoetry.wordpress.com/2011/07/03/poem-in-the-midst/

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  35. This was quite xcellent.

    Love the wording and the cadence and the imagery.

    This felt like such a perfect little gem of a rhyme.

    Thanks for sharing it.

    A+

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  36. Very nice entry. I love the style along with the imagery. Great job.
    William

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