Thursday, September 29, 2011

A Short Story in 55 Words


 Xcitedly,
She blows them off
her red lips,
The way she eXits
bad friendships;
eXcellently,
Bubbles swim,
climbing above her hands,
Carrying dreams;
Bubbles scream,
Traveling with winds,
bearing regrets;
Light touches down,
Whispering joy,
It doesn't matter
how short a life lives,
Nothing is better
than 
creating 
something
eXtraordinary
and
beautiful
to reach
bliss.

Alphabe-Thursday (X=Xcitedly, eXcellent, eXit, eXtraordinary)



                
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58 comments:

  1. JudieSeptember 29, 2011 at 3:42 PM

    Great writing on this! Oh, and I love blowing bubbles!!

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  2. Jannie FunsterSeptember 29, 2011 at 4:20 PM

    And when it makes the world a better place, as your words do here... Total bliss achieved.

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  3. MISHSeptember 29, 2011 at 5:11 PM

    Charming and full of fun !
    http://writer-in-transit.co.za/bubble-bravado/

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  4. Maude LynnSeptember 29, 2011 at 7:19 PM

    This is so fun! Well done!

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  5. MaggieSeptember 29, 2011 at 7:52 PM

    Xcellent! Brava. : )

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  6. G-ManSeptember 29, 2011 at 8:39 PM

    So....
    Ya killed 4 birds with one stone eh?
    You Rocked this out Morning!
    Loved your 55
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

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  7. KaySeptember 29, 2011 at 9:10 PM

    I love the last lines! Nothing is better! xoXox

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  8. Karen @ Pieces of ContentmentSeptember 29, 2011 at 9:25 PM

    Nicely captured and written.

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  9. Brian MillerSeptember 29, 2011 at 9:40 PM

    nice playon the letter X...a fun read...

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  10. AnonymousSeptember 29, 2011 at 10:26 PM

    Exuberant playful bubbles! Fun 55. :)

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  11. AmesSeptember 30, 2011 at 12:43 AM

    Nice piece!~Ames

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  12. Seraphinas PhantasieSeptember 30, 2011 at 2:37 AM

    Just wonderful !

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  13. Gemma WisemanSeptember 30, 2011 at 4:47 AM

    Creating something extraordinary is empowering!

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  14. AnonymousSeptember 30, 2011 at 6:22 AM

    Xtreemly well done!

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  15. MarySeptember 30, 2011 at 7:42 AM

    Visiting from Poets United, I'd say this is an Xquisite red write! A vivid scene painted with words.

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  16. DaydreamertooSeptember 30, 2011 at 7:52 AM

    Exactly. if the life is well lived, it doesn't matter counting the years.
    A lovely piece.

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  17. Brother OllieSeptember 30, 2011 at 7:53 AM

    it all starts with those red lips...

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  18. AnonymousSeptember 30, 2011 at 9:00 AM

    Very enjoyable, and I like the sentiment expressed in the last sentence. Beautifully said.

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  19. Teresa MarieSeptember 30, 2011 at 9:21 AM

    I loved this one!! Great job. Peace, Terri

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  20. Rocky Mountain WomanSeptember 30, 2011 at 9:48 AM

    cool....

    love the word imagery....

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  21. EllaSeptember 30, 2011 at 10:02 AM

    Stunning view over here! ;D

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  22. ScarletSeptember 30, 2011 at 2:05 PM

    like the fun and bubbly read ~

    have a good weekend ~

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  23. Marbles in My PocketSeptember 30, 2011 at 2:09 PM

    Wonderful words and thoughts, so well written.
    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/09/30/bubbles-and-lies/

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  24. jaySeptember 30, 2011 at 2:39 PM

    * Applause!!* This is just beautiful!!! :))

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  25. ElizabethSeptember 30, 2011 at 3:19 PM

    Very cool! I love the rhythm of this story-poem!

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  26. HelenaSeptember 30, 2011 at 3:24 PM

    X-ceedingly well done. You blew some away with this one....!!

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  27. tigercitySeptember 30, 2011 at 3:26 PM

    now that is what I call a quality piece.. nice rhythm and a cutting edge too.. I shall be back.. ;)

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  28. tigercitySeptember 30, 2011 at 3:33 PM

    ah yes.. the ending is bliss.. an unconscious nod?

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  29. Ann LeFloreSeptember 30, 2011 at 4:44 PM

    Morning this is so charming and filled with so much fun. Thank you for the visit to my blog site and the lovely comment you left me. I love your blog and enjoy reading it so much
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/09/29/bubbling-potion-of-love/

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  30. bendedspoonSeptember 30, 2011 at 6:49 PM

    You have just manifested what you have shared -- "creating something eXtraordinary and beautiful". Beautiful! :)

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  31. cj SchlottmanSeptember 30, 2011 at 7:51 PM

    Love the idea of reaching for bliss!

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  32. UnknownOctober 1, 2011 at 9:57 AM

    The woven themes... experiences, release, bubbles, relationships... lend a depth to this short piece. Terrific use of metaphor.

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  33. storybeaderOctober 1, 2011 at 11:04 AM

    short lived but so beautiful! {:-Deb

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  34. IsadoraOctober 1, 2011 at 11:27 AM

    I love the fun element that comes through. It is eXcellently done.
    Namaste,
    Isadora

    http://insidethemindofisadora.wordpress.com/2011/09/30/bubble-magic/

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  35. AnonymousOctober 1, 2011 at 12:40 PM

    I love how everything just congeals - and in only 55 words! I can't seem to get across a story in less than 1000!

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  36. Ed PilollaOctober 1, 2011 at 1:50 PM

    you speak to me. creating something beautiful is one of the very best things of existence.
    :)
    thanks for your support:)
    i think you are a truly amazing poet.

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  37. LolamouseOctober 1, 2011 at 4:54 PM

    So true! Short but sweet.

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  38. Alice AudreyOctober 1, 2011 at 9:13 PM

    You've given me a bit of bliss with the description.

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  39. magiceyeOctober 1, 2011 at 9:14 PM

    love the imagery!

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  40. The PostManOctober 2, 2011 at 6:39 AM

    Bubbles Bubbles such gleee.
    Thank you for sharing.

    Im going to put a link up to your blog from my blog. :)Hope you dont mind

    Regards
    The PostMan
    http://postcardsinthewind.blogspot.com/

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  41. AnonymousOctober 2, 2011 at 8:12 AM

    Excellent piece, I like the imagery of this.

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  42. Tina´s PicStoryOctober 2, 2011 at 2:51 PM

    lovely pic :)

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  43. emanita01October 4, 2011 at 2:30 AM

    I really enjoyed this one, Thanks!

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  44. LydiaOctober 4, 2011 at 3:37 AM

    This is so great! All those Xes are used perfectly. I am seeing this as a poster. :)

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  45. AnonymousOctober 4, 2011 at 7:18 AM

    I really like this one and love the first stanza. I wrote one with a different take on bubbles you might like.
    http://blackswanpoetry.wordpress.com/2011/07/03/poem-in-the-midst/

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  46. CatherineOctober 4, 2011 at 11:00 PM

    Fantastic! I love the photo!
    -Catherine

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  47. JennyOctober 6, 2011 at 12:12 PM

    This was quite xcellent.

    Love the wording and the cadence and the imagery.

    This felt like such a perfect little gem of a rhyme.

    Thanks for sharing it.

    A+

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  48. Rosemary Nissen-WadeOctober 7, 2011 at 3:48 AM

    Lovely fun!

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  49. e.a.s. demersOctober 10, 2011 at 5:52 PM

    Wonderful! :-)

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  50. William LeedOctober 23, 2011 at 9:46 PM

    Very nice entry. I love the style along with the imagery. Great job.
    William

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  51. AnonymousFebruary 7, 2015 at 8:42 PM

    beautiful.

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  52. AnonymousFebruary 9, 2015 at 9:45 AM

    love this.

    :)

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  53. AnonymousFebruary 9, 2015 at 10:54 AM

    this is beautifully done.

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  54. Lotie Bollag Mosher Kloppenburg Romney February 10, 2015 at 8:40 PM

    beautiful.

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  55. Malia Craig Tagg Lawrence PageFebruary 10, 2015 at 9:20 PM

    incredible.

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  56. Kora-Leah Meet Faust WilsonFebruary 11, 2015 at 11:25 AM

    this is well done.

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  57. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallFebruary 12, 2015 at 8:51 AM

    powerful....

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  58. AnonymousFebruary 17, 2015 at 10:16 AM

    love this.

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