Sunday, September 25, 2011

No Mood for Phoenix (Haikus in Magpie Tales)


Deep inside the box
is aesthetic paradox,
fooling all of us.
.
The sky is crying,
Cosmic insignificance,
A myth is cooking.
.
At midnight picnic,
I chew on dark thoughts between
slow sips of wet rain.
.
Car tires have gone flat,
Sadness attacks like rattlesnakes,
No mood for phoenix.                                  


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Haiku Heights  Day 25, Free style, Day 26,  Phoenix


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61 comments:

  1. kaykualaSeptember 25, 2011 at 12:38 PM

    No mood but never mind, life is fun! Beautiful verse!

    Hank

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  2. JJ Roa RodriguezSeptember 25, 2011 at 12:48 PM

    Better with no emotion than feeling low.

    Nice take on the prompt!

    JJRod'z

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  3. MonikaSeptember 25, 2011 at 12:49 PM

    Terrific, it is! wow!

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  4. AnonymousSeptember 25, 2011 at 1:26 PM

    intriguing beautiful words!

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  5. Tess KincaidSeptember 25, 2011 at 1:30 PM

    Midnight picnic and rattlesnakes...good stuff...

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  6. Susie ClevengerSeptember 25, 2011 at 1:49 PM

    At midnight picnic,
    I chew on dark thoughts between
    slow sips of wet rain....I so like this! Sometimes writes about the darkness are the best work..

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  7. MaggieSeptember 25, 2011 at 2:24 PM

    Wow, I love the various images. I'm a sucker for haikus as well. Wonderful.

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  8. AnonymousSeptember 25, 2011 at 2:49 PM

    I am a fan of midnight picnics and this poem :)

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  9. Madeleine Begun KaneSeptember 25, 2011 at 3:03 PM

    Lovely haiku!

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  10. Chronicles of IllusionsSeptember 25, 2011 at 3:18 PM

    some very interesting takes on the image

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  11. AnonymousSeptember 25, 2011 at 3:37 PM

    I like your cooking myth.

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  12. keiths ramblingsSeptember 25, 2011 at 3:41 PM

    Love it! A really tasty haiku!

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  13. miss pieSeptember 25, 2011 at 3:54 PM

    rain and flat tires.... it is an adventurous combo....

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  14. Lady EmSeptember 25, 2011 at 4:19 PM

    I love the third verse. Gorgeous!

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  15. Kay L. DaviesSeptember 25, 2011 at 5:41 PM

    I love the lines:
    "I chew on dark thoughts between
    "slow sips of wet rain"

    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

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  16. Sean VesseySeptember 25, 2011 at 5:42 PM

    I love haiku tales,
    with the way they twist and turn,
    to the end whimper.

    Good work!

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  17. Magical Mystical TeacherSeptember 25, 2011 at 6:04 PM

    Yeah, I'm not much in the mood for a phoenix either, but I'm going to slog my way through scribbling a haiku on that topic and see what I come up with. Yours is a fascinating tale!

    Seed-Feathers and Wayside Pool

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  18. siggiofmaineSeptember 25, 2011 at 6:44 PM

    Enjoyed your post...
    interesting form to read.
    Thank you.
    ☮ Siggi in Downeast Maine

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  19. dsnake1September 25, 2011 at 6:48 PM

    >>"Sadness attacks like rattlesnakes" - wow!

    i like this darkly ethereal poem. :)

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  20. andy sewinaSeptember 25, 2011 at 6:50 PM

    Yeah, I like the bit about slow sips of wet rain!

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  21. Granny SmithSeptember 25, 2011 at 6:55 PM

    Enigmatic, as good poetry should be.

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  22. Craig WatsonSeptember 25, 2011 at 8:14 PM

    I chew on dark thoughts between
    slow sips of wet rain

    Love it !

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  23. Arian TejanoSeptember 25, 2011 at 8:31 PM

    Those abstract words speak to me with potent voice. Wow!

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  24. LBTLSeptember 25, 2011 at 8:31 PM

    I am trying to get the hang of limericks but so hard for me, as most forms tend to be. Good job here, happy gooseberry day!!!

    http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/09/25/karmic-disobedience/

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  25. Marbles in My PocketSeptember 25, 2011 at 8:49 PM

    Wonderful group of haikus. Very nice.
    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/09/25/one-she-beckons-me-come-2/

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  26. LBTLSeptember 25, 2011 at 8:52 PM

    I appreciate the third stanza, how awesome of an imagery you painted, real cool!!! happy gooseberry day!!

    http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/09/25/karmic-disobedience/

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  27. HazelSeptember 25, 2011 at 10:10 PM

    I'm intrigued when a myth is cooking. Love "midnight picnic"

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  28. Ramesh SoodSeptember 26, 2011 at 1:20 AM

    Well, I like the line that talks of chewing dark thoughts..beautiful well done..

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  29. KaySeptember 26, 2011 at 2:45 AM

    It's an amazing night. Very well done.

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  30. hyperCRYPTICalSeptember 26, 2011 at 3:04 AM

    Beautiful words.

    Anna :o]

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  31. Rachel Hawkins-CrockfordSeptember 26, 2011 at 3:55 AM

    Love the images in these haiku, particularly: "I chew on dark thoughts between/ slow sips of wet rain" Nice stuff!

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  32. Rosemary Nissen-WadeSeptember 26, 2011 at 4:44 AM

    I enjoyed these!

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  33. Brian MillerSeptember 26, 2011 at 7:43 AM

    i chew on dark thoughts between sips of rain...that line is particularly evocative....

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  34. SuzSeptember 26, 2011 at 10:07 AM

    interesting haiku

    I like chew on dark thought too

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  35. gautami tripathySeptember 26, 2011 at 10:38 AM

    I too chew dark thoughts.

    Beautifully written...

    Here is mine:

    unhinged

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  36. HelenSeptember 26, 2011 at 11:49 AM

    Great job! Writing haiku is not an easy task, you rise to the challenge beautifully.

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  37. DaydreamertooSeptember 26, 2011 at 1:29 PM

    I had a flat tire the other day. cost me $140 to get it changed. Had to buy a new one. I was in no mood for anything then either!

    Great write, even better read, thank you :)

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  38. Tumblewords:September 26, 2011 at 5:53 PM

    Beautifully done, each and every one!

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  39. UnknownSeptember 26, 2011 at 6:28 PM

    each it's own paradox...

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  40. AnonymousSeptember 26, 2011 at 11:58 PM

    Interesting direction!

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  41. AnonymousSeptember 27, 2011 at 7:03 AM

    Sadness attacks like rattlesnakes...

    Love that.

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  42. Traci BSeptember 27, 2011 at 7:54 AM

    A lyrical and mysterious tale here; I enjoyed the read. :)

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  43. Emanita01September 27, 2011 at 9:51 AM

    I chew on dark thoughts between
    slow sips of wet rain...

    Oh, I do like that! I do, I do, I do!

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  44. AnonymousSeptember 27, 2011 at 10:42 AM

    wet rain :) that is something to think about! love it!

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  45. Classic NYerSeptember 27, 2011 at 11:59 AM

    Oh, I LOVE this! You, my friend, have a way with words.

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  46. LolamouseSeptember 27, 2011 at 12:01 PM

    I love the line "sadness attacks like rattlesnakes." Amazing how you were able to write one poem and incorporate all those prompts!

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  47. Short PoemsSeptember 27, 2011 at 2:12 PM

    Beautiful haiku!
    I enjoyed the read!

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  48. AnonymousSeptember 27, 2011 at 3:02 PM

    Words and picture are very evocative...

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  49. Snail SweatSeptember 27, 2011 at 4:33 PM

    "an asthetic paradox" such a simple and beautiful line that has so much meaning in todays world. lovely, simply lovely.

    if you have the time id like you to check out some of my poetry i think you would enjoy it.

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  50. Cathy FeasterSeptember 27, 2011 at 8:29 PM

    "At midnight picnic,
    I chew on dark thoughts between
    slow sips of wet rain" Great verse...this was a nice piece.

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  51. Rek SeshSeptember 28, 2011 at 1:13 AM

    Beautiful expressions...loved the combination standing out on their own.

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  52. AnonymousSeptember 28, 2011 at 1:19 AM

    Lovely set of haiku. Well done!

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  53. linda maySeptember 28, 2011 at 4:51 AM

    I like the way you used words here.

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  54. Dave KingSeptember 28, 2011 at 5:33 AM

    Some very creative images and similes in this.

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  55. relSeptember 28, 2011 at 5:56 AM

    "I chew on dark thoughts between
    slow sips of wet rain."
    I've been there; recently as a matter of fact.
    rel

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  56. Ed PilollaSeptember 28, 2011 at 12:41 PM

    a myth is indeed cooking with a midnight picnic. chewing on dark thoughts between slow sips of rain? i love ballsy characters:)

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  57. AnonymousSeptember 28, 2011 at 2:51 PM

    from the sky cryin to slow sips... great write

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  58. Grå SkySeptember 30, 2011 at 9:04 AM

    Beautiful choice of words an imagery -well done Morning!

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  59. StaffordOctober 1, 2011 at 2:01 PM

    "I chew on dark thoughts between
    slow sips of wet rain." Oh yes, I relate to that!

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  60. ShonEjaiOctober 2, 2011 at 2:43 AM

    I am utterly impressed

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  61. LydiaOctober 4, 2011 at 3:39 AM

    Stafford copied the exact line I was going to copy here. It is a great line in a poem that certainly suits the image. Just excellent. :)

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