Saturday, September 10, 2011

Recall 9-1-1.....Sunday Sentiments



Recall  9-1-1,
When I look into your eyes,
I wish to love more.

I’m trying to undress myself
To make my thought visible,
I’m trying to blind you to my sorrows,
I’m trying to figure out the darkness invisible
Between our unintended errors,
I’m trying to stay away from gossips
On the arch of ladys’ feet,
I’m trying to walk you across the hardships
above the eyebrow to feel great,
I’m trying to be the cell phone
You dial for an important date,
I’m trying to be the stone
You wield to skip across a lake.



Bluebell Books  Short Story Slam Week 9

ABC Wednesday  I is for I ‘m Trying

Haiku Heights  Day 11: Free Style

Happy September, Happy Blogging! 

36 comments:

  1. This is a very deep piece, filled with longing. What excellent words you have written here.

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  2. I like it because it reminds me of being selfless but it inevitably also reminds me of my favorite selfish song: The Nicest thing - Kate Nash http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=41R1jN26b4I

    Take care and keep smiling. <3

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  3. After reading this and all of your efforts that you are putting into trying to be for someone...My question is what are they putting into trying to be for you...hope it is mutual because that works for me.. ;)
    RYN thank you.

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  4. i really enjoyed reading this. so much to feel!

    Happy September to you too!

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  5. Daydreamertoo,

    The poem is only one piece of expressions, not related to real life.

    every poem speaks one opinion or represents one voice, it is a literature, not necessarily writing to show my real standing or anything.

    Thanks for caring.

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  6. simply fantastic.
    loved it...

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  7. you are many things!


    Aloha from Waikiki;


    Comfort Spiral


    > < } } ( ° >

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  8. In trying to be so many things...don't forget the beauty of being "you" lovely poem

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  9. Excellent haiku with an important truth.

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  10. I felt wonderfully positive and optimistic after reading this - without feeling anything is too easy either.

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  11. Hopefully you will achieve all you aim for. Delightful.

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  12. Nice sentiments expressed!! .... and even if you achieve a small part, it will be a battle half won

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  13. I like your wishes.. may it come true for you someday.

    On this fateful day, I pray for peace for everyone ~

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  14. Splendid piece with a sense of yearning, but still looking forward to a journey :) nice

    http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/09/10/the-crepuscule/

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  15. Beautiful! Peace and love to you. I think we all want to be important to someone. We all want to be that 'cell phone.'

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  16. A beautiful poem. Very nice read.
    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/09/11/farmers-lament-2/

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  17. Well, I really love this poem. Have wee tears in my eyes after reading...and feeling it. It's a gem.

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  18. Oh! This is absolutely beautiful. It is so giving. Thank you!

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  19. Very powerful writing. Liked it very much. Well done.


    Melanie

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  20. Deep and expressive piece with a tenderness. I liked the haiku to start.

    Here is my entry.
    http://jackedwardspoetry.blogspot.com/2011/09/rose.html

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  21. What can I say except wow?! Great job. Blessings, Terri

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  22. Wonderful closing image. I love the skipping stone.

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  23. What a thoughtful piece, esp. the line about undressing to make thoughts visible! Wow!

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  24. It's refreshing that a post with a 9/11 title isn't necessarily about 9/11....from the stance of pop culture and ethnography, the one date affects veritable strangers...those with no ties to New York, the Pentagon, etc. I appreciate that it's weaved here into daily life and some sort of relationship.

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  25. I’ve always been intrigued with the many facets of a woman. I suspect an average female could put a princess cut diamond to shame. Thank you for exposing a few of them.

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  26. awesome composition...great choice! mine is up too...:)

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  27. Of course we'll forget, collectively, as the population ages. Remember Pearl Harbor. Remember the Maine. But we don't.
    ROG, ABC Wednesday team

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  28. Such a powerful piece of work and so well done the message here is so lovely and filled with your heart
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/08/27/the-island-breeze/

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  29. you expressed some lovely sentiments in this

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  30. Beautiful thoughts!

    Inspector Hector is my letter I. Hope you can drop by!

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  31. so sad... so profound... so beautiful

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  32. I don't know if this will make sense....I don't feel I can write a comment that justifies the beauty and sense of longing that I feel in this piece.

    Wonderful writing

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