Saturday, November 5, 2011

Weekend Prompts: Where Are You When...?

Where are you
when frightful figments
are cooked to crop my feathers,
and make war between you and I?
Where are you
when schemes of sentiments
seem too strong to be punctured
and delight in carnage jerks your mind?
Where are you
when hearts thumping,
flickering hope is twitched in the gutter
and melted like butter?
Where are you
when fables are caught in bloody bottle
and faith is carved up,
gurgling down the sidewalk?
Where are you
when she is lost in your love maze
and fidelity evaporates
upon your distanced gaze?



Check out the following links to participate:

3WW CCLXV: carnage, jerk, puncture


Carry On Tuesday # 130 : Where are you?

Wordle 28 : Bloody, Gurgle, Sidewalk, …





36 comments:

  1. Amazing imagery in each line. So very vivid. Nicely written.

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  2. Awww... it speaks of loyalty not being there and of being let down in some ways.
    Very image filled.

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  3. Excellent use of the prompts, impressive. Thanks for visiting me and reading.

    Pamela

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  4. Such a great poem of trying to figure out what makes someone else tick. Sad content, wonderful poem. Sometimes the sadness makes the writing strong, huh?

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  5. Excellent! Thanks for including Carry on Tuesday in this super piece

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  6. "when fables are caught in bloody bottle and faith is carved up" loved this! Excellently written.

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  7. I am impressed.. you weave all the prompts together. Nice refrain of Where are you ?

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  8. There is a frenzy to this that shows through the words.

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  9. Thank you...enjoyed this very much,
    Peace,
    Siggi in Downeast Maine

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  10. Enjoyed reading your post.
    Had a nice flavour.
    William

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  11. A pretty intense write. Well done. : )

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  12. Ouch! You made me feel all of it.
    Good piece.
    ZQ

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  13. Morning, Really nice! I enjoyed your poem very much. Blessings, Terri

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  14. Excellent metaphors. Tremendous write.

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  15. the words flow and the metaphors use is just fitting in the excellent delight.. :)

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  16. Wonderful write, Morning! Very nice!

    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/11/07/the-wonder-of-you/

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  17. Your vivid images leave a strong emotional impression, and the poem moves very well. These words were interesting prompts, and you've put them together in an unexpected way to good effect.

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  18. "when she is lost in your love maze
    and fidelity evaporates
    upon your distanced gaze?"

    Leaves one with an enduring image. Great word flow and imagery.

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  19. Very much enjoyed this piece...Adura took the stanza I was going to highlight, a wonderful spin of words ~

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  20. what a battle between you and the prompts, my oh my

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  21. Wow! What figurative language! Nice write indeed!

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  22. I really like your take on this: it's fresh and conveys a newness of feeling.

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  23. Nice write!! Looks like a lot of answers are needed and the poet has a grouse to settle!!

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  24. This fells like the cold, damp and windy night we are having...it is lonesome, silent and sad, and I love it.

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  25. I really enjoyed the flow and wordplay of this poem. It was fun,
    this was my favorite line "when she is lost in your love maze"

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  26. amazing how you can use the prompts and weave it into such a lovely poem. :)

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  27. Goodness gracious, what fun you must have had with this!

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  28. wonderful weaving of the prompts into a great poem!

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  29. this poem resonates on me... Uhh... :)

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