Saturday, November 5, 2011

Weekend Prompts: Where Are You When...?

Where are you
when frightful figments
are cooked to crop my feathers,
and make war between you and I?
Where are you
when schemes of sentiments
seem too strong to be punctured
and delight in carnage jerks your mind?
Where are you
when hearts thumping,
flickering hope is twitched in the gutter
and melted like butter?
Where are you
when fables are caught in bloody bottle
and faith is carved up,
gurgling down the sidewalk?
Where are you
when she is lost in your love maze
and fidelity evaporates
upon your distanced gaze?



Check out the following links to participate:

3WW CCLXV: carnage, jerk, puncture

Funny Bunny Fridays Week 4 (November 4-13, 2011)

Carry On Tuesday # 130 : Where are you?

Wordle 28 : Bloody, Gurgle, Sidewalk, …

Poetry Picnic At The Gooseberry Garden:

The Poetry Pantry Is Now Open! - 

Short Story Slam Week 13


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36 comments:

  1. Belva Rae StaplesNovember 5, 2011 at 2:16 PM

    Great use of the prompts!

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  2. The Write GirlNovember 5, 2011 at 8:32 PM

    Amazing imagery in each line. So very vivid. Nicely written.

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  3. DaydreamertooNovember 5, 2011 at 9:39 PM

    Awww... it speaks of loyalty not being there and of being let down in some ways.
    Very image filled.

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  4. flaubertNovember 5, 2011 at 10:37 PM

    Excellent use of the prompts, impressive. Thanks for visiting me and reading.

    Pamela

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  5. Mihir VatsaNovember 6, 2011 at 6:17 AM

    Very nice, Morn! Loved it! :D

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  6. Judy RoneyNovember 6, 2011 at 8:56 AM

    Such a great poem of trying to figure out what makes someone else tick. Sad content, wonderful poem. Sometimes the sadness makes the writing strong, huh?

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  7. keiths ramblingsNovember 6, 2011 at 10:55 AM

    Excellent! Thanks for including Carry on Tuesday in this super piece

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  8. Laura MariaNovember 6, 2011 at 1:35 PM

    "when fables are caught in bloody bottle and faith is carved up" loved this! Excellently written.

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  9. ScarletNovember 6, 2011 at 1:58 PM

    I am impressed.. you weave all the prompts together. Nice refrain of Where are you ?

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  10. AnonymousNovember 6, 2011 at 2:58 PM

    There is a frenzy to this that shows through the words.

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  11. LBTLNovember 6, 2011 at 3:43 PM

    This was sad :(

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  12. siggiofmaineNovember 6, 2011 at 4:07 PM

    Thank you...enjoyed this very much,
    Peace,
    Siggi in Downeast Maine

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  13. William LeedNovember 6, 2011 at 4:18 PM

    Enjoyed reading your post.
    Had a nice flavour.
    William

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  14. MaggieNovember 6, 2011 at 5:01 PM

    A pretty intense write. Well done. : )

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  15. Craig WatsonNovember 6, 2011 at 5:14 PM

    Nice flow....

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  16. AnonymousNovember 6, 2011 at 5:34 PM

    Ouch! You made me feel all of it.
    Good piece.
    ZQ

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  17. Teresa MarieNovember 6, 2011 at 11:56 PM

    Morning, Really nice! I enjoyed your poem very much. Blessings, Terri

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  18. KayNovember 7, 2011 at 12:39 AM

    Excellent metaphors. Tremendous write.

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  19. Chim's World of LiteratureNovember 7, 2011 at 1:13 AM

    the words flow and the metaphors use is just fitting in the excellent delight.. :)

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  20. anthonynorthNovember 7, 2011 at 3:01 AM

    A great job combining all there.

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  21. Marbles in My PocketNovember 7, 2011 at 9:01 AM

    Wonderful write, Morning! Very nice!

    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/11/07/the-wonder-of-you/

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  22. Elaine DanforthNovember 7, 2011 at 3:28 PM

    Your vivid images leave a strong emotional impression, and the poem moves very well. These words were interesting prompts, and you've put them together in an unexpected way to good effect.

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  23. Adura OjoNovember 7, 2011 at 7:33 PM

    "when she is lost in your love maze
    and fidelity evaporates
    upon your distanced gaze?"

    Leaves one with an enduring image. Great word flow and imagery.

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  24. AnonymousNovember 7, 2011 at 10:19 PM

    Very much enjoyed this piece...Adura took the stanza I was going to highlight, a wonderful spin of words ~

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  25. Chronicles of IllusionsNovember 7, 2011 at 10:24 PM

    very nice

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  26. AnonymousNovember 7, 2011 at 10:31 PM

    what a battle between you and the prompts, my oh my

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  27. AnonymousNovember 8, 2011 at 1:01 AM

    Wow! What figurative language! Nice write indeed!

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  28. Dave KingNovember 8, 2011 at 3:26 AM

    I really like your take on this: it's fresh and conveys a newness of feeling.

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  29. Shail RaghuvanshiNovember 9, 2011 at 12:07 AM

    Very well written.....

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  30. NankaNovember 9, 2011 at 3:35 AM

    Nice write!! Looks like a lot of answers are needed and the poet has a grouse to settle!!

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  31. Janet MartinNovember 9, 2011 at 9:09 PM

    This fells like the cold, damp and windy night we are having...it is lonesome, silent and sad, and I love it.

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  32. The Nefarious XNovember 10, 2011 at 5:11 AM

    I really enjoyed the flow and wordplay of this poem. It was fun,
    this was my favorite line "when she is lost in your love maze"

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  33. dsnake1November 10, 2011 at 7:28 AM

    amazing how you can use the prompts and weave it into such a lovely poem. :)

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  34. Rosemary Nissen-WadeNovember 10, 2011 at 12:46 PM

    Goodness gracious, what fun you must have had with this!

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  35. LolamouseNovember 10, 2011 at 2:57 PM

    wonderful weaving of the prompts into a great poem!

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  36. NeniNovember 12, 2011 at 8:11 PM

    this poem resonates on me... Uhh... :)

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