Choka is new to me. I like your rhyming.
wow it's also new to me... and the poetry is so critical...:)
Nicely done. I like the scheme.Here is my week 8 story: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/18/amber-waves-of-grain/
Good first attempt. The rhyming was a very creative addition. The syllable count in a tanka is 5-5-5-7-7. In the second line the syllable count was 6. Just a small mistake. But i enjoyed your poem. :)
Oh, how clever. I may have to try one : )
I didn't get it.But you seem to have done well.
Good job,I didn't get it.However I tried.
Good start ... keep going!!
Very interesting! Thanks for enlightening me!
This made me smile ... and think of my grandchildren. Lovely.
These short forms are kind of fun. More difficult than one might imagine.
I'm not sure if the short ones are easier or harder! Good job!http://www.benjity.wordpress.com
Fascinating take. Thank you! :)
Interesting and clever take on the prompt ... and a different yet fascinating poetry form ...
Very interesting! I like it! Especailly how August is a blister makes me think about lots of things.Blessings
Love the short form.
After reading yours, I'm not sure that I did mine right. I enjoyed yours though! :)
I have to admit, Choka is an unfamiliar form to me, as well.... I often stray into the all too comfortable Iambic pentameter or tetrameter... but, I'm willing to experiment :-)wonderful piece, by the way! Short, sweet and mesmerizing :-)
Love this,although it is unfamiliar territory for me :)
You have brought the pieces together well.