Saturday, August 20, 2011

In The Next Galaxy (Short Story Slam in Poetic Form In 55 Words)

 

Short Story Slam 8



Poetry Picnic Week 1 At The Gooseberry Garden

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Too many gossips,
Too many hardships,
Trees block her views too,
Thus, she decides to close her eyes,
and let the world do time travel:
In a second, she’s in the next galaxy,
Beautiful and free,
The sky is blue,
The space is open/cool,
Best of all, she meets him,
A dream comes true!

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46 comments:

  1. G-ManAugust 20, 2011 at 8:11 PM

    Ahhh...
    The worlds cheapest means of transportation. And no passport needed.!!
    Remember, I post at 8:00 PM Thursday Night. More people should read what you have to say.
    Most Excellent 55.
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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  2. ScarletAugust 20, 2011 at 8:46 PM

    Imagination is the best. Specially early in the morning.

    Nice to meet you ~

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  3. AnonymousAugust 20, 2011 at 8:53 PM

    Beautiful thoughts, expressed well. Nicely done!

    My week 8 story: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/18/amber-waves-of-grain/

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  4. DonnettaAugust 20, 2011 at 9:35 PM

    I think I've been on that journey. Lovely words...D

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  5. LydiaAugust 21, 2011 at 6:01 AM

    Totally captivating 55 poem for a lovely photo.

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  6. MISHAugust 21, 2011 at 7:24 AM

    The most economical means of transportation - it costs nothing and knows no boundaries ... lovely take on the pic !

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  7. CadAugust 21, 2011 at 8:24 AM

    You've linked this to Poet's United Thursday Think Tank according to their Linky List, but only mentioned G-Man's 55 in your post - which is not really playing the game, is it?

    It's only fair to give a passing nod to the Blog whose Linky List you are using as a free 'advert' for you own blog...

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  8. TALONAugust 21, 2011 at 12:32 PM

    Awww...I love magical 55's. :)

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  9. AkelamaluAugust 21, 2011 at 1:31 PM

    You can't beat a vivid imagination. :)

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  10. Jesse.s.mitchellAugust 21, 2011 at 8:06 PM

    awesome

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  11. AnonymousAugust 21, 2011 at 8:15 PM

    best of all ;)

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  12. AnonymousAugust 21, 2011 at 8:44 PM

    hmmm an escape from reality, I like those too :)
    mine is here: http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/08/21/vanished/

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  13. AnonymousAugust 21, 2011 at 8:45 PM

    Wonderful trip.

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  14. Madeleine Begun KaneAugust 22, 2011 at 1:38 AM

    I enjoyed that!

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  15. AnonymousAugust 22, 2011 at 8:06 AM

    quite simple and nice

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  16. AnonymousAugust 22, 2011 at 8:31 AM

    very cool read. nice job on this

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  17. DaydreamertooAugust 22, 2011 at 10:22 AM

    Awww if dreams came true. I hope she meets the man of her dreams.

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  18. Ramesh SoodAugust 22, 2011 at 11:41 AM

    " She meets him.." essence of the poem... well written..

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  19. Gigi AnnAugust 22, 2011 at 1:10 PM

    Now that is what I call a journey.

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  20. MaggieAugust 22, 2011 at 1:59 PM

    I can relate. I am the queen of the daydreamers. : )

    Love it.

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  21. MijayamiAugust 22, 2011 at 11:57 PM

    I need to learn how to do what she does... Love the photo, too.

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  22. Chim's World of LiteratureAugust 23, 2011 at 5:34 AM

    this was a magical poem, it reached deep into the imaginations....

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  23. Lord EmmanuelAugust 23, 2011 at 11:00 AM

    Wow...must take a lot of imagination to teleport in that capacity. I am also a fan of teleporting and could relate first hand. Nice one.

    Nice to meet you on the Blogosphere.

    Cheers!

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  24. IreneAugust 23, 2011 at 11:29 AM

    I am now lost in a daydream... Wonderful read! :-)

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  25. AnonymousAugust 23, 2011 at 2:56 PM

    Indeed to travel away like a bird on the wing, leaving our troubles behind for others to stress over. Great write.
    Genebrother

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  26. AnonymousAugust 23, 2011 at 2:57 PM

    Great work--I loved reading it

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  27. AnonymousAugust 23, 2011 at 2:57 PM

    Very nice trip away-- I feel refreshed just reading it (:

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  28. AnonymousAugust 23, 2011 at 3:54 PM

    lovely combination of the prompts! ♥ i really enjoyed this!

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  29. e.a.s. demersAugust 23, 2011 at 5:05 PM

    How cute! and freeing! well done :-)

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  30. AnonymousAugust 23, 2011 at 6:47 PM

    Very nice and positive... I enjoyed it!

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  31. The Lonely Recluse.August 23, 2011 at 7:37 PM

    Lovely poem this, really like the ending.
    The Lonely Recluse.

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  32. AnonymousAugust 23, 2011 at 9:08 PM

    ...A dream comes true!...
    Beautiful!.
    Thank you.

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  33. MargaretAugust 23, 2011 at 9:44 PM

    All that by closing her eyes. I loved this.

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  34. AnonymousAugust 23, 2011 at 10:36 PM

    ohhhh! such a simple and wonderful way of expression... Thank you for share...

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  35. kaykualaAugust 24, 2011 at 1:40 AM

    Imaginations can sometimes work on the subconcious and make them come true. True love may just be around the corner. Thanks for dropping by

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  36. JamieDedesAugust 24, 2011 at 2:09 AM

    Yep! Dreams do come true, Morning! Wonderful sentiment. Happy days.

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  37. AnonymousAugust 24, 2011 at 12:57 PM

    I love the morning. Nice take on the prompt. Happy Rally!

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  38. Sherry Blue SkyAugust 24, 2011 at 7:49 PM

    Lovely. I felt like I was lifting up too, escaping for the time it took to read it. Well done.

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  39. M. A. S.August 25, 2011 at 1:40 AM

    I love the journey here.

    And this line is absolutely stunning-
    Thus, she decides to close her eyes,
    and let the world do time travel:

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  40. AnonymousAugust 25, 2011 at 9:52 AM

    now this is what poetry is all about- short, succinct, sweet!

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  41. AnonymousAugust 25, 2011 at 1:36 PM

    Lovely and to the point :)

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  42. AnonymousAugust 25, 2011 at 2:07 PM

    Isn't imagination wonderful?

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  43. HelenaAugust 25, 2011 at 3:17 PM

    Wonderful. Closing our eyes, and escaping to the Galaxy, Xanadu....or a few places I can't tell my husband about.....*ahem*

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  44. IsadoraAugust 26, 2011 at 5:56 AM

    In my minds, eye I am imagining every word.
    Very nice,
    Isadora

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  45. Uma AnandaneAugust 26, 2011 at 12:11 PM

    Yea I agree with G-man...cheap and best travel

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  46. ChristineAugust 26, 2011 at 8:28 PM

    open field and the space around, close your eyes, yes, I can feel the transportation

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