I like the idea in this poem. Maybe the last line could be shifted to "only faith remains"? That would make it a more succinct and immediate statement, rather than using the infinitive and putting distance between the reader and the idea. :o) Here's my offering this week:http://caridwen.wordpress.com/2012/04/04/drafting-in-memoriam-adrienne-rich/
I like the idea in this poem. Maybe the last line could be shifted to "only faith remains"? That would make it a more succinct and immediate statement, rather than using the infinitive and putting distance between the reader and the idea. :o) Here's my offering this week:http://caridwen.wordpress.com/2012/04/04/drafting-in-memoriam-adrienne-rich/
wow nice meaning !
ReplyDeletewow! sad! :(
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But faith is everything. Nice haiku.
ReplyDeleteFaith does take us a long way!
ReplyDeleteSo breathe, smile and grin!
good use of words! but it makes the haiku optimistic. keep going!
ReplyDeletesarah
Wonderful optimistic spin. Faith is sometimes all that will carry us through.
ReplyDeleteShalom,
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nicely done!
ReplyDeleteLoved it Ji.. Thanks for Sharing..
ReplyDeleteSomeone is Special
Nice! You could have submitted this one for the "Faith" prompt as well! Thanks for visiting my blog!
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written haiku, love it :)
ReplyDeletevery lovely. beautiful take on the theme.
ReplyDeleteyour talent is really amazing.
trisha
love this!
ReplyDeleteI like the idea in this poem. Maybe the last line could be shifted to "only faith remains"? That would make it a more succinct and immediate statement, rather than using the infinitive and putting distance between the reader and the idea. :o) Here's my offering this week:http://caridwen.wordpress.com/2012/04/04/drafting-in-memoriam-adrienne-rich/
ReplyDeleteI like the idea in this poem. Maybe the last line could be shifted to "only faith remains"? That would make it a more succinct and immediate statement, rather than using the infinitive and putting distance between the reader and the idea. :o) Here's my offering this week:http://caridwen.wordpress.com/2012/04/04/drafting-in-memoriam-adrienne-rich/
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